This is my story about Lost Kids. And I hope you enjoy reading it.
This story is set in the forest and in the forest there are lots of creatures there and lots of trees and lots of dirt on the floor. This is where my friends and I find ourselves.
Hi my name is Alaskah and I have a black long hair and I love chocolate and I have 3 friends name Hunter that loves healthy food and has long black hair and she loves playing soccer. I also have another friend name Mary that has long black hair and she loves playing tennis and she is good at maths at school and loves sweets. Besides don’t forget I have another friend name Saunoa and he is a boy and he loves playing soccer and he is good at reading at school and he loves eating McDonalds.
My friends and I are sick of our parents telling us what to do all the time, so we ran away. When we ran away at night time they were asleep. We knew this was going to happen and what time we will go was because we plan this at school as I was saying so we went at night time, when they were asleep and we went at 7:00 at night time. But there is a good news and a bad news and the good news that our parents can’t tell us what to do anymore and the bad news is that we ended up in a forest.
Now we don’t know the way to home and we don’t have money to buy things we needed and we don’t have a drink to drink and we don’t have any food to eat.” WHAT ARE WE GOING TO DO!!!” said me.
“Now me and my friends is very sick in this terrible forest” said Saunoa.
“But we can’t just sit here we got to do something” said Mary.
“But what should we do?” said Hunter.
“ I know” said me.
“What is it” said Mary.
“I have a plan” said me.
My friends and I are sick of our parents telling us what to do all the time, so we ran away. When we ran away at night time they were asleep. We knew this was going to happen and what time we will go was because we plan this at school as I was saying so we went at night time, when they were asleep and we went at 7:00 at night time. But there is a good news and a bad news and the good news that our parents can’t tell us what to do anymore and the bad news is that we ended up in a forest.
Our parents was really worried about us, how I know because me and my friends saw it on the newspaper and the newspaper said that these little young kids ran away at night time on Monday at 7:00 and there parents are worried about them so the parents was calling a helicopter to fly in the sky to look down and to find us. So my plan was if we go to the mountain then we can be safe, eat, drink, sleep and all thing and will be home because the reason why we would go to the mountain was because the helicopter is always loving the mountain and loves to go there.
Now me and my friend can rest, eat, drink and when we went back home our parents started to be nice to us and no gruelling because they don’t want us to ran away again.
Talofa lava
ReplyDeleteAlaskah I really love you writing and that it hooks readers in that it just makes me want to read more about it. I've got a tip for you make sure before posting your writing first thing is to read over you writing.
I wonder how you do you hook in the reader.
From:Jeanette
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ReplyDeleteHi Alaskah,
ReplyDeleteI like your story and about what you enjoyed doing and what you love.Well done but read over it.
How did you love these things?
From James
Hi Alaskah,
ReplyDeleteI like your writing about lost kids. I also liked how you used lots of dialogue. It looks like you getting better at writing every week. How did you come up with this title?
Keep up the good work.
From Denzal
Thanks for your comment.
DeleteHow did you come up with this title? Well because my story was about me and my friend hated the way our parents treated us so we ran away so we were lost and we are kids. Does this make's sense or not.
It does make sense.
DeleteThanks